What are the advantages and disadvantages of ever-increasing use of technology
What are
the advantages and disadvantages of ever-increasing use of technology.
We live in
the age of technologies. It means that we are forced to use different gadgets to keep up with the time. I strongly believe that nowadays many people
cannot imagine spending even one day without smartphones, laptops, etc. On the
other hand, some persons say that gadgets have ruined their lives. That is why,
it’s difficult to answer: do the modern technologies make our life better or
worse? I consider that ever-increasing use of technologies help people to be
more educated and keep in touch with other people, but it may lead to the
problems with health.
First of
all, I would like to discuss the role of technologies in modern education. It’s
difficult to find school or university without computers, electronic boards and
access to the internet now. Teachers and professors use it for finding addition
information, showing video, etc. Moreover, it is possible to study without
going to school/university for students who have some problems with health or
just want to learn some addition material. According to these facts,
technologies help us to study.
Secondly,
it’s important to pay attention on the opportunity which allows us to keep in
touch with other people. Until the beginning of the 21 century there was no possibility to
call distant relatives every day or send a message within a minute and immediately
give an answer. That is why technologies are so important for human’s communication.
Unfortunately,
we cannot avoid bad consequences of ever-increasing use of technology. One of
the most well-known disadvantages of gadgets is bad influence on the vision. Besides,
the author of the article “From neck problems to hearing loss: How technology
might affect your health” writes that bright screens of our gadgets become unhealthy
at night because they interfere with the natural rhythm of our bodies. He also
says, “Overreliance on computer aids of all kinds may rob our brains of the
stimulation they need to stay healthy.” (O’CONNOR, M. (2016, January 17). From neck problems to hearing loss: How
technology might affect your health. From Neck Problems to Hearing Loss: How
Technology Might Affect Your Health.) I’m sure there are many other examples of bad
influence of technologies. I hope scientists will be able to make our devices
safer soon.
To sum up, ever-increasing
use of technology has some disadvantages, but it has many advantages as well. Steven Spielberg says, "Technology can be our best friend, and technology can also be the biggest party pooper of our lives". I think we should remember about all disadvantages but appreciate many great opportunities which were given us by modern devices.
Thanks for sharing your essay draft with us. I'm planning to discuss it with you and your peers in class today (11.12.2018)
ОтветитьУдалитьOne aspect of your essay that needs to be revised is the conclusion because good conclusions go beyond restating the thesis statement.
УдалитьHere's a resource with a number of ideas about writing the conclusions that I found interesting. Look through it yourself and if you like the suggestions made there you can use one of them to improve your own conclusion: https://bit.ly/2SF5K1T. You will find not just the information about possible concluding techniques but also a threaded discussion about different ways of starting and concluding oral or written presentations
УдалитьHere is a resource in which a number of techniques to write effective conclusions are discussed: https://bit.ly/2SF5K1T. Could you check it? You will find not just the information about possible concluding techniques but also a threaded discussion about different ways of starting and concluding oral or written presentations. It'd be great if you found the suggestions made there interesting and used one of them when revising your essay draft.
УдалитьDear All,
ОтветитьУдалитьthanks for agreeing to read and discuss your peers' essays. I am sure it'll help you to write your own works better. Here are some questions to consider as you read the essay:
a) Is it interesting?
b) is there enough support?
c) Mechanics: Grammar, Punctuation, Spelling?
d) Language
e) Style
Thank you for your comments, Natalia Yurievna.
ОтветитьУдалитьThey are very useful. I will correct my mistakes.
I've reread your essay again and can say that it is written rather well: it's interesting to read and is based on the discussion of a number of situations from your own experience. I found them quite appropriate for the discussion in the given context. The example from O'Connor's article is very interesting and helps to make your essay more persuasive and engaging.
ОтветитьУдалитьAs I have mentioned in my comment about the conclusion, you should try to revise it to make it more substantial. I'd advise you to use one of the techniques from the resourse I'd like to share with you: I'll add the link later.
I'd advise you to use one of the techniques for writing effective conclusions: check this resource https://bit.ly/2SF5K1T. You will find not just the information about possible concluding techniques but also a threaded discussion about different ways of starting and concluding oral or written presentations
ОтветитьУдалитьI've rewritten my conclusion using quotation.
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